Reviews for The Alarm Clock Conspiracy

Reviews For: The Alarm Clock Conspiracy

Lionesscouer 2008-02-08 ch 10,	abuseHi there... I just found your story today and am reading it now. If flows beautifully so far and is so magical to me, I just can't stop reading it. I can't think of anything to criticize.. this is just too beautiful and entralling.. Very nice work! : )
Maple 2004-07-14 ch 7, anon.	abuseHi! I just read your story for the first time and I abosolutely loved it! I was so lucky to find it; it was entirely by chance. I really liked the parts about the dwarves. I thought the stories and the swordfighting were really interesting, and you can tell you know what you're talking about. And I think the title is so cool...it's really original, and I'm curious to find out how it applies to the rest of the story. I know you're supposed to give constructive criticism in reviews, but I'm not sure what to tell you. I guess the only thing I didn't really like were the author's notes sometimes injected into the middle of paragraphs to explain things. That was a little confusing. But other than that...great job! It's been several months since you updated, and I hope that's just b/c you're so busy, and not because you abandoned the story. If you do update again, this will be one reader who sticks w/ the story. --Maple
AngelGirl 2004-03-01 ch 7, anon.	abuseGood chapter!! It took me a minute to think back to who Jocelyn was, but then I got it, haha. The end was def. my fav. part...I was laughing out loud. : ) Keep up the good work!!
PinkPixie 2004-02-20 ch 6, anon.	abuseSweetie, this story kicks some serious **! You have a real talent and it's awesome that you're sharing it with the world. : ) I have to say, I think this last chapter has been my favorite so far. I laughed my butt off. I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the amazing work!!
AngelGirl 2004-02-04 ch 6, anon.	abuseBest chapter yet!! I loved it! Please update soon!!
faded felicity 2004-01-24 ch 6,	abuseHey, I'm lovin' the story so far. I love the change of setting every now and then. Keep it up! Adds this to fave story list
KidWithCurls 2003-12-28 ch 5, anon.	abuseSo Luke likes Laurel, eh? That'd be an interesting pairing. Please, please update soon! I feel like it's been forever. : ) **K w/ da C
Iphicalf 2003-11-04 ch 2, anon.	abuseHey, Ostara, it's Iphicalf. This story is lovely, and I can't wait to read Chapter 3! I love the main character, and I think the dialogue and plot are the strongest points. I found a couple of little things... most of them are a matter of personal taste, though: I like simple tag lines that always use the verb "said," but I know a lot of people get bored with that... so whatever you like best. Also, in the second chapter, I'm finding it hard to place Laurel's age. Maybe I'm not reading carefully, but you might wanna check that. I thought, too, that it would be a good idea to mention her sister's marriage in more than just casual parenthesis... I remember when my older sister moved away, and it was really hard for me. There's so much potential for emotion in Laurel's sister's wedding, and I think it would make a fabulous chapter. Maybe it can even be one reason for her to run away. Take my suggestions or leave them; you know the story better than I do. ;) Anyway, once again, I love this story. I wish I could come up with stuff like this... ~Iphidryfbhaskrjyvakvragrvkasrsgerkseykrvsturkdjbrgvylatbeosiulrcvyalebsiury;LAP8O6VLAKSJGH BIYRAPSLIEUY
AngelGirl 2003-10-19 ch 4, anon.	abuseHey, pretty good story, I'm liking it a lot! You're pretty creative. One thing though, sometimes you tend to tell the reader what's going on more than showing them...sometimes showing makes things is a bit less confusing. But really liking it so far! Keep going!!
Saturn Winterleaf 2003-09-19 ch 1,	abuseyay i lurved it. coninue soon!!

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