I like the poem's structure. The imagery is done well. I don't know if you intended this, but it reminded me a great deal of Hamlet's Ophelia.

I love your style, and the way your words just sort of trip over into the next line, but it seems utterly natural. There is a delicacy and innocent beauty about this poem which I love, one of those things that's so perfect it almost has a smell.

Anyway, I'm rambling. Just wanted to thaks for the lovely review. And, I'm Capricorn too. It's not all bad. =)

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Hello again!I like this... especially how you matched up the beginning lines with the end.Even though its about contradictions, it makes perfect sense, and I admire it. ^_^ I made a poem similar, but not exactly the same subject... and I don't even know why I wrote it, mostly because I forget. (Made it in... 2002?) Similar in title, too. Mine is called simply "contradictions". Yours is far better though! Gosh, I read my old poetry and come to realize how bad it sucks. :p Oh well, it's still worth keeping... memories, or something... ;)Perfect rythm btw!

Interesting. I think most people live lives full of contradiction. And most poignantly, I identify with the feeling you expressed of being surrounded by people, yet always alone. A nicely done poem.

That was really beautiful. I really liked it. I just came across you, but you've got some beautiful poems. Well done! And keep up the great work. :)
Sarah

thanks 4 the review! and now...you!
I'm glad that you arent one of those sing-song, rhymey kind of poets
I like the "I am"s, those really have impact.
the repetition of the first stanza really worked out
the only thing that seemed to not fit in, was "I am doing well at school,I am a drop out at fifteen,"
The other part of the poem is mystical and random and powerful
If you want to keep the school part, I would suggest something along the lines of, "I am doing well at school, I am understanding nothing,"
Oh well, just a little helpful advice, critisisim always helps!
Happy Writings!
-Niggles
^_^

I muchly like!^^

oh...very contradictory...i like it.

A very spiffy poem (Contradictions are cool!)

Great poem! I like it a lot...the flow, the wording, everything! Grerat job and keep writing. Would appreciate if you could R&R some of my poems...

Wow! this one is really great! *does a happy dance* and its long! i luvs its precious yess!

oh i really LOVED that one! even though it contradicts i can relate to every single line because it ALL sounds like me...perhaps you've just proved that people are many-sided!!

GREAT JOB!!

sorry, i couldn't be bothered to log in. thanx for reviewing my poems. There are two things that are not as good as the rest of poem. one is that the first two lines of the second verse do not contradict each other, and that in doesn't rhyme with trends. thats all... overall a good poem.

I loved the line "I am a haggard crone"

I like this one alot better, still with the self-deprication, but i loved the contradictions you came up with. I dont think that the last stanza was neccesary, especially as it was my least favorite, but i think that if you MUST have it there, then inversion of the couplets is the way to go

zac
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