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| eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee 2003-10-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseO. Interesting |
| ID 2003-10-05 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou've emphasised the repetitiveness of your boy's life through all the 'predictions' he makes of his future, but it doesn't seem to have enough description of his living or working conditions, type of food he ate. Yes, he works in a factory, with many other immigrants and their children, but it lacks detail for a history task. However, it is sad. |
| unika 2003-09-29 ch 1, | abuseBO YOU SUCK YOU PEICE OF CRAP! no, jk. Kool story :) |
| Baby Milo 2003-09-22 ch 1, | abuseThat's sad, but very good. Well written and intriguing. Keep up the good work! |