This has a nice flow to it!

Thats pretty cool. I dont understand what the situation was between you 'two' but I liked the structure and the rhymes, and the wording. All very nice and fluid.

This is great, I love your poems, wish mine were as good as yours.

AH BRILLIANT ENDING! That was, that was wow is what that was. My goodness, so fricken awesome. This flowed extremely well, and you make great use of imagery. I think it's interesting that you start so many of your lines with the word So, but not all of them, any particular reason for that or is it just how it all came out? Anyways, hats off to you on an excellent piece of work.
~ winter

*sighs* I know EXACTLY how you feel. I, too, am dark, lusting for a light man. *sigh*

Keep writing!!

I really liked this. I feel I can relate too.

Updated And my bottom lip trembles. Your turn to update Kiss from the Angel of Death hun. Else no more Bob drinks for you.

Bob: heh?

*walks off in a huff - you hear her moans as they trail away in the distance* why even have a muse if he doesn't listen to you?

Bob: *looks around* heh?

simply beautiful; your mastery and unparalleled flair of the pen, or rather, noisy little labeled cubes, at one of its finest moments. ah, yes, i should inform you: this is druid of crimson evesong, formerly huntress of silver twilight, formerly echo druid. yes, i changed it again! ::triumphant pose:: let's just call me alli, shall we? well, they wouldn't let me use just Arashi, (what my boyfriend calls me, well, his formal name for me anyway. it means storm or tempest. people stole it and they suck). but i like this one. so it won't change, probably. anyway, back to praising you: so lovely. reminds me...the whole time it reminded me of my boyfriend and i...you make me weep. and i've tried so hard not to today...but your simple yet enchanting poetry did this to me, so it's a good sort of crying. damn, i have to go. update?

Brilliant. There are no other words.

Bob: Except for the synonyms of brilliant.

*blinks* Synonym? Wow. Bob's been reading the dictionary again.

Bob: *walks off in a huff*