I like it a lot! very cool! You were recommended, so here I am! (oh yeah, by the way, Amberose is my sister, if you were wondering.)

(this is Amberose)
Yeah, I liked it again, re-reading it! Still an awesome poem. Should have got more reviews...s'not fair is it? Seems like everyones left Fictionpress, they're pretty slow on the reviewing lately...ah well. Good poetry is good poetry, with or without the reviews. Keep at it!!
-Amberose

You did well in conforming to a 8-8 syllable rhyme pattern in your verses (assuming you pronounce different diff-er-ent instead of diff-rent, like I usually do. Dern accent.) However, I think in some lines you sacrificed too much proper grammar to do that (maybe verse 17) Of course, perhaps I'm being an idiot and you like that style. If so...well, there's a reason I reviewed anonomously.

-Eliott85

I love it! I love the way you arranged the lines, Iambic perameter, right? At least that's what I think it's called. I had to read over it again to fully comprehend it, but the second time through when I knew how to readit, I enjoyed the confusion. So much more interesting that way. Good job!!
-Amberose
Write more poetry soon! I love to read it.