This is an absolutely amazing story!

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Ai

OMG he had a Harley

Ahh sarcasm a beautiful thing.
If we didn't have sarcasm who would ** of all the jack asses in the world?

Seriously? A fight over where a person gets to sit at lunch? Of all the...Sorry. Seems a bit immature to me. High school kids don't act like this. It's kindergarten material.

Hehe. Nice open-ended yet happy ending.
As for what you said about happy endings in the romance genre, well, in all honestly, a lot of people read romance because of the happy endings. In a way, romance is the ultimate fantasy. In general, people can't believe in "magic" per se, but when we call it love, suddenly, we can. So, falling in with that, the rest of the fantasy is the happily ever after. As for happy endings, in general or in this specific case, being unrealistic, well, the question is why? What makes it so unrealistic? And if you're busy pointing out any excuse for it to be so, then you're really not falling into the spirit of it, eh?
So, thank you for a wonderful little piece of simple romance, without the worrying about how cliche love is or how cliche the happy-ending is. Because, honestly, anyone who reads this and thinks about how overdone happiness is... well, they're small-minded and, brutally, a bit boring.:-P

Your an amazing author. Please get published. This story is hilarious, I wish I could come up with the crazy lines you put into this. And Christian is such a cutie. I love him! Heck, I want a guy that smells of vanilla and old books. What kind of guy smells like old books?! So cool. :) Cory annoys me though. Ugh. Even though the popular group sounds a little ditzy they sound like fun. I'm siding with them right now, especially since Christian is part of them. Keep up the good work. :)

Congratulations!

Wow, you're such an amazing writer! The dialogues are just so realistic and humorous...I was ROFLing throughout this chapter. :D

Ayla was such a mature character for 16. Both the main characters had intelligent beyond their years, a reflection of yourself? Well I loved the story. So well written and deep. Cliche yet not cheesy. :)

I Loved this story ^.^ Your style of writing and the humor is really engaging! I couldn't stop reading, till i finished:P I like the ending lol

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I don't see the guy's sarcasm and could you elaborate more on the setting? It's important especially if you want to set the mood.

Still. Good job.

Your writing style is very interesting.

Your character is also very interesting but I do have something to say about her.

She sounds mechanical and very Webster. It's like hearing a Philosophy student who had adopted the way Hume writes in her speech. And that does not include the (indeed) cliché "Cogito ergo Sum."

Please try to make her voice a little more natural.

You have a gift.

I just hope my comment will help. I would like to comment a little more I just don't have the time. Begging your pardon.

Continue writing.

Really enjoying this!

Amazing story. The end is so beautiful. Nice job!

This is really good.