What a creative way to express rain. Beautiful. Very light yet hurtful. I love it. Thanks for your reviews by the way.

~_*

~Koe~

Makes me feel a turbulent gray inside. Like a storm cloud. Fantastic imagery.

I like it, again the adjectives create a dense atmosphere. I also love the way your description of nature can be applied to the human dimension, seen as metaphors for spiritual truths and emotions - this becomes apparent especially in that appeal at the end.

Quite honestly, I didn't see anything horribly cliche. Unless your teacher has something against metaphors, then I don't understand why you got an 86. Maybe he's one of those stupid people that only liks free verse poetry. There are too many of those people. -_-
I thought the idea of clouds as eyes was very cool. Yes, rain has been compared to tears many times before, but I haven't seen any that actually mentioned the eyes the tears were formed in...I liked the extra explanation. That scrapped what would have been cliche. Maybe your teacher needs to read things more thoroughly. ^_^()

I don't know much about it having too many clichés, but it's awesome. I LOVE the image... there's just... It's just such a clear picture. I especially liked the third stanza. My favourites list is maxed out (can you believe the nerve of only giving us a max amount of 50?!?! *winks*), but I would definitely have put this one in there... Fortunately, they didn't say anything of listing extra favourites in one's profile though... :-P

No, no, you didn't use too many cliches by far. I think your teacher was being a bit too biased. (accentuate on the 'as' part) Woops, naughty, naughty Catty. Oh well, I liked it mucho mucho grande (don't speak spanish so if that's wrong- oh well)!
-Cat

86? you deserve a much higher grade. xD

You most certainly did not use cliches. Those were original words.
Keep writing. This was a beautiful poem.

read mine?

The only cliche I could find was in the last para
Well done once again

Now that's what I call some really vivid wording... truly fantastic. The tone used for the poem was unique, but I really liked it. The third stanza was my favorite; the "curtains torn" was a nice touch. All in all, marvelous work!

Brilliant! There are simply no other words to describe it! So honest and true! Wonderful!

86? What?? Huh. Was the meter predesigned for the class, or did you come up with it on your own? aba bcb cdc ded ee...that can be hard to write, but you excuted it very nicely. Definitely A material, at least. That's ridiculous.

~lyv

~ Touching and sentimental. I like this. Write on.



c. butterfly~**

86?! EIGHTY-SIX?! I would've given you 186!

Okay, there's no such thing, but this is an awesome poem. So ignore the teacher and keep on writing like you do because even though I've only read a few of your works, you're great at writing.

Which reminds me...

*Add author to my Favorite Authors list*

Don't listen to your Enlish teacher, I liked this poem just fine, and I'm sure that many others on FP would agree with me. There are so many ways you can express something; so many different ways to write poetry...and the way you write deserves a 100% for sure.

^.^