I am really enjoying myself reading all of your pieces of beautiful work here. This could very well be a song. To better days, Jess. Jen

It would be beautiful as a song...mind if I try? ^^ How is your talent so abundent? I'm in awe, always. Later.
~Shuffle Queen~

I really liked how you broke this poem/song into different lines like that, very intriguing.

oh this is good. is it a song? if it is do you have a tune for it? it sound so awesome! but what is "it"? just wondering. ;)

That would make a cool song.

This is another awesome poem (or song). Yes, I'm begging, but could chords be possibly made available for this? Eh? Pretty.

Beautiful. cheers. to better days. and better lives.

This is very choppy, but it would make a good song. I think that you could even add mor to this and make to even better. At least, that's my opinon on this. It was good.

~Cirien Phoenix of the Eternal Phlame

OH! This could fit with some dark music...i like it...^-^

It's good I like "You’re wrong The wrong part of me" it has tons of emotion built in it... repetetive at times but songs are supposed to be like that it's good ^_^|/ JMBunny

Enjoyed the way you expressed a deep pain and hatred, mixed with the sense of hope to overcome in the musical flow of the work.

Keep on writing!

Kinda reminds me of Linkin Park *saw them live, they rule*. If you haven't noticed most of their songs capture the rage of the break up of a relation ship. While it doesn't exactly reach that point, it does discuss some of the feelings one goes through. Write on Sista.

I love this. As soon as I read it I started singing it and had it stuck in my head all day. I love the meaning of this poem, and the word choice was great. Great poem/song. Oh and do you have a tune for this, if you do I would love to hear/see it.

^^ OOj! This song is really good! =D o.o I need reviews on my stuff. -.-;

I love the structuring. (: Great repitition of words to emphasize the meanings too.. Thanks for reviewing my very first pieces!