An absolutely amazing and wonderful story! I couldn't really bring myself to actually stop reading it once I started and ended up staying awake, reading for two days until I was able to finish your story. This is the only story on fictionpress that I have done that with. Truly a diamond in the rough.
I honestly hope that you will continue writing the sequel to this story. I'm eager to learn more about Caran, Matt, Zak and Simon. They seem to be the true main characters of this story and I really love following them around.

Should you publish this in actually print, I would be more than willing to pay money to buy it. Definately worthy of publishing.

... i've nothing to say to this chapter...

its ok, i guess... but i'm going to stop reading now... maybe i'll read again some other time.

Good work, its a great story.

o, koolme like

**... me no like where this is leading :(

hehe, good chappie :D

i have a feeling they're not going to get out... sigh

oh damn... matt's gonna get caught~! >.

still alive for a while at least? please don't tell me he's gonna die?? :O

no~!

Good chappie :D

lol, good chappie~! :D

lol, you're really dramatic... dunno if that's a good thing :S

yosh~! finished chapter four~! so far so good~! yoo ha~!

yosh! chapter 3 i'm done reading~! w00tits good, even though i read up to this here and beyond some time ago (when i first found this story many a seasons ago...)

looks like i'll be rereading most of it... can't seem to recollect a lot of the story :(

ok, I just read some of the reviews of your story... and there's two things I have to say:1. you've got really really wonderful reviews, which means your work is really good, which makes me wonder why you didn't get more of them!! :P2. the reviews spoiled parts of your story for me :(

you see, I stumbled on this ficcie a long while back (before you changed the title and all that jazz) and yeah, I've only read a few of the chapters... its on my favorite list though, I'll definintely get around to reading them all... and then I'll proceed to read your second book :)

So keep up the good work eh? I'll make sure to review every chapter :D (if you can't tell, i'm really hyped up about reading this story... but university isn't giving me any time and i'm just procrastinating right now :()

Yuy Ren

are you absolutely sure that English isn't your first language? Cos I find your writing absolutely beautiful! =)

No kidding, but I haven't seen really good English writing in a long time, especially on such freelance sites as Fictionpress.com. ;) I'm a native English speaker, and even I can't write this expressively! So, keep it up! =P

Plotwise I kind of guessed maybe somewhere around chp 20 that Caran was a half-elf... but then the elves were supposed to be gone for a long long time, so... unless they're an unacknowledged branch of the Merrets. Certainly would explain the Heyde fella's hostility, but still doesn't quite explain why Caran and Matt are powerful while the Merrets are, I assume, not.

Anyway, I'll keep checking back for your next chapter! ;) Take your time to write, quality is always worth it.

Well done, this is a well written story with suprisingly few mistakes, I have seen much worse from people for whom English is their first language. Your story starts with character development, as all good books/series do, because if you don't develop the character before the plot then you end up trying to develop them during the plot, and this ends up detracting from the story overall. I have enjoyed this story so far and while you have made a few grammatical mistakes, they have been nothing to speak of, all in all a good effort, which I look forward to reading the rest of.

From Paul in Australia.

Wow! Wonderful. We are finally getting more clues about Caran and her brother. I can't wait to finally figure it out.

As usual, all the language is wonderful. You just need to find a beta tester to fix the little grammar problems. Every once in a while, though far less often than before, you use "are" in place of an "is". But other than that, I couldn't find anything big. Sorry it took so long to read and review the latest two chapters, but I was in Florida and didn't have much time to read. Anyway, update soon!