|Reviews for Reality's Veil|
| Eckrice 11/4/03 . chapter 1
This is good writing too, but once again, I don't get it. Oh well.
Who is Morbane?
| Ahrar Nighthammer 10/13/03 . chapter 1
It is a little abstract, but it deliver's it's message very well for being so short. And it is kinda cool.
| Morbane 10/3/03 . chapter 1
Abstract suits you, but you could cut this a bit. There are beautiful phrases in here - watch me ADMIRE "reality is a miserly god" and "banished by a quick turn... of the light" but there are clichés in here too that you need to go hunting. For example, in the sentence "Tiny hairless beings that somehow possessed a clumsy grace of their own..." I suggest deleting "of their own". There are other places where you could delete stuff. I'm sorry... I'm only being harsh because I know you're a good writer.
It interests me that you start with "The age of dreams is past" then near the end, "Dreams will never die". I'm not sure your progression from one to the other was clear.
| Roberta Pryce Robinson 9/30/03 . chapter 1
Brilliant, is the first word that springs to my mind! The flow of the words, their use, literally sang the story. They lent the magic to it's song! You have given life and brought to reality my childhood dreams! Very well done! Excellent! I am astounded!
| Grimsister 9/29/03 . chapter 1
*sigh*...I loved it