At first I thought it would be something Blade-ish (vampire/angel coming to rescue the earth), but then you went and gave it depth and something more, something I can't quite lay my hand on, in what is in the end a rather short piece of writing.
"This woman; this being, was faster than her foes." the semicolon should just be a comma ('this being' is an appositive)
there is apparently a sudden sound that tears through Chael. you give no indication of such a sound. please do.
'a handsome and rather attractive vampire'. handsome means rather attractive, so this is a bit redundant.