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AVIGON 2003-10-07 . chapter 1
Love it, just love it.

At first I thought it would be something Blade-ish (vampire/angel coming to rescue the earth), but then you went and gave it depth and something more, something I can't quite lay my hand on, in what is in the end a rather short piece of writing.
Aenigma Darai 2003-10-05 . chapter 1
"This woman; this being, was faster than her foes." the semicolon should just be a comma ('this being' is an appositive)
there is apparently a sudden sound that tears through Chael. you give no indication of such a sound. please do.
'a handsome and rather attractive vampire'. handsome means rather attractive, so this is a bit redundant.
Andaren 2003-10-01 . chapter 1
Sad :( you should read my story 'The Alpha Warriors and the Soul Crystal', there's a character called Jason in that, and he's a vampire.

Interesting ... an angel/vampire hybrid! Cool concept!

Blessed Be,

Andaren x
K. Evenstar 2003-10-01 . chapter 1
This was chilling - well done.
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