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| ameilia lochart 2003-11-21 ch 1,  | abusegreat story! More detail, please. And more chocolate. |
| HeartMender 2003-11-09 ch 1, | abuseCUTE!! Very cute!! Tonya |
| purple-panther 2003-10-13 ch 1, | abusehaha! that story is so silly! it's cute! there are a few little glitches in the story, such as, wouldn't the police man be calling for backup instead of cowaring behind a tree?? Wouldn't the paramedics that got Jonathan gotten scared when they got there? Other than little stuff like that, this story is uberly cute! ~purple-panther~ |
| shadowdreamer7598 2003-10-02 ch 1, | abusethats a cute story! you're a really good writer. the thing is, i think no one has reviewed it because the title and story description make the story sound a bit "fluffy", or childish, if you know what i mean. But keep writing!! :D |