Anguish. I am simply amazed at the passion that fuels this. I am in wonder, and I'll let you know when it ends...

Very very very good poem. It sounds more angsty and sad than angry, tho. Unless you meant angry at yourself...? Anyway, good metaphors, well written, etc. Love your writing.

I can totally relate to this. It's great stuff though..you still manage to make it beautiful even though you're angry. Takes talent...

I liked how you inserted all the quotes in italics (they fit, oddly enough, and even when they didn't they made scary sense), but...it doesn't seem angry. It seems despairing and sad and depressed and go-away-I-don't-like-you -

Er.

Whatever it is, no, you DON'T deserve it.

Hey, really good poem. I know that life really does suck sometimes, but we just gotta pull through. Sorry, I'm never really been much a help to anyone. Anyways, as far as the poem goes, really good at expressing how you feel.

P.S. Thanks a lot for reviewing "Fading." It really meant a lot to me. See you in band!

floofe...
you don't deserve this. no, you don't. remember that quote on your bumper sticker? the one that says fate is knowing that it will all be okay in the end? well i started believing it and i'm the happiest girl you know right now, so i would suggest listening to yourself. nobody hates you. i hate seeing such a great person cry. dry your tears and read this new poem im posting soon.

*hugs* I dont want to be the b%tch that critiques harshly, but I'm in creative writing now...so- I like this one alot, but I just dont follow it. What is it that you deserve? also, some words i meself use many a time(numb, cold, and so forth) seem to be all in the same place, thus they lose the passion and meaning behind them. yesh, i feel mean now

this is a haunting, sad poem, but at the same time, it reminds me of a flame, flickering in the darkness, before slowly dwindling down to nothing...