Oh, goodness. I can hardly think what to say! This is just amazing. The entire thing is, in a word, amazing. Everything you write is exactly that, and so much more. Beautiful, amazing, wonderful . . . words can hardly describe it! This, along with your other brilliant poems, have blown me away.
Amazing! Keep this up, dearie. :-)
~ Cinna.

it almost reminded me of "the tell-tale heart", by edgar allen poe. this is excellent work. very cool!

>mysterykittyx

LAURA...this is BEAUTIFUL!!

Wow, I really wish I could write a review that would justly praise all the incredible word choice and meaning and everything you've got in here...but a) it's nearly 1 a.m. and b) that would take an age.

So...suffice it to say that I am totally blown away, and you did ever so much better on this topic than I ever could have done, so thank you for writing it. :o) Such a gorgeous scene deserved something stunning, and you've done it more than justice.