i sent this one to a friend I thought could relate...it was really touching.

Great imagery in this poem. And I quote, "Salty tears flowing freely off my face
To land on the moonlit floor"
I like the way you took ideas from earlier work to create it like the mask thing.
Ohh I really love this poem.

Hey, it's me... *dogslova* -cough- lol. Well, nice poem Monica... And the one with the true friends...it is very true for me. This one too, definitely the part:
"It watches my false smile
Of joy and happiness
While inside
I’m burning with misery and hate"
Like I said, I really think you can be a writer in the future and if not, then at least write on your spare time and let me read them. :)Wish I can express my feelings inside as good as you, haha.

Something in that just makes me want to cry myself. Very sad, but very soul searching-ish.

Wow! I can definitely relate to this!! This was really good!!

Abbie

that was awesome! i like how you made loneliness seem like a monster taking someone over... or maby i got it all wrong. but even if i did i thought it was really good.

Pretty good a lil dark but good non the less. You're a good writer kid keep it up laters!

~Sammy

oh... awesome poem! I really really liked how you ended it... with the sentence:
And I will be lost past the end of time

that really made an impact and kept the poem lingering inside of me

OMG WOW~! that was s0o0o0o0o good. i espesecially like the part "It watches my false smile,Of joy and happiness,
While inside,I’m burning with misery and hate" thats kewl. well neway. very nice!
byez!
~me

Much applause, my friend. I like this one a lot. I don't generally go for the non-rhyming stuff, myself - partly because I'm much better at rhyming and partly because most of the stuff I've read is crap. (I've only written a couple of non-rhyming poems, and lo, they were crap as well.) But you've got a good, strong emotion here, which is fantastic (and it's one I've felt, which helps), and you manage to pull it all together nicely without making it choppy. Flows well, and whatnot. I'd point out all the things I like, but I'd wind up quoting a good deal of it, so I'll only point out one - the line about 'holes Which are my eyes' was the first to catch my attention. Nicely said! ^_^

((Thankies for commenting on my story blurb, btw. Reviews are always appreciated, wot! Answering your question on it - I put in subtle hints along the way that you don't really catch unless you know what's coming. Whee. ^^))

*sniffles*

so...sad...*cries*

MA would just love this poem, it's so...angsty and Marakai-ish.

Nice job.

*sniffles*

^.^()

i like it.it's is very emotional and touching as well as expressive

This is a nice poem, though in the last stanza are you talking bout your boyfriend? Cause I get the idea that you're trying to get your boyfriend to put you back together. Though its good. Very nice.

i really like your poem, and i really know how u feel. it took a lot of guts to put something like that into writing.
-Loopy