I don't know much about poetry, but nice work. It's creepy, and nice.

really rally wonderful poem. i coudl feel the emotion. (which is good). luvved it! great poem, greater poet.

SP

i like it, very nice and well mostly everything poetic and has blood in it i like so heehee sry! but i really like this keep it up

I like the other one more. This one seems that it's told from their POV ... not just one. It'd be better if one didn't know exactly what the other was thinking.
I really like the last three stanzas though.

Hm... Datz what you think pala ha... HeHe... mwah! *hugz again* ... wE cAn MaKe ArranGeMenTs... ;P