This is was an awesome poem...It really has great detail and I like the ryms (srry cant spell today). Feel free to r&r some ofmy stuff

Well, I don't really know what to say. It is different from other works.

this was such a great poem, purely because its all sugar and candy until the very last line of each stanza and you kind of hit the me with this disturbing concept, catching me by utter and lovely surprise. the ideas were very original, and i liked the touch of reality the not quite perfect descriptions gave *i tend to not be able to stand to much optimism*

by favourite line of the whole poem would hvae to be this one...

"Crucifying the butterfly I confess"

i jsut loved it so much, so delicate yet chilling at the same time. i have never read anything like, amazing work, kudos.

There's a tiny shop that sellt silk painted clowns... this reminds me of those. Bright, colourful, but a little creepy.

Conjured up powerful images. *applause*

Mia

Damn, this is going on my fav. list XD Thats all I can say!

It left me hanging there for a while but i get what you mean, I guess everyone can't hurt to have their own fantasyland.

Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful!

I really like how you paint an image of beauty and complete tranquility, and then the last two lines allude to death and paradise (I think, anyways- it could also be the garden of love and falling in love, but not completely there yet).

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Eh. It's a little, um, odd, but you knew that. I really like it though...very symbolic and such...

What's an amatory?

I love the lines: "In the doorway stands the little elves,

Paperdolls on the golden shelves"

It's very very symbolic! Nice job...it's awesome purple beans! XD

winged one