Oh my, this is so beautiful and touching. It has a lovely rhythm that flows nicely, and the content surely strikes home, especially to those who can empathize and identify. Your images are grand, and the graphic, vivid description adds to the intensity of the poem. This is on my favourites list. ;-)

You've used angst without going overdoing it.

Kami, whatever incident you've based this on...

You're another whom I won't be looking at your impossible-to-prounounce-without-butchering-pseudonym... without thinking of Heart of the Sword's poem 'Brick Wall'.

And you should never be bothered if any reader(s) minds your darker works: Take the good AND the bad.

i love this! it's brilliant!

You are easily one of [if not] the best poet on FictionPress. This poem only stretches this further. Your poetry is ripe with imagery and emotions, flows brilliantly, extremely insightful, and always with something to say. I salute you for your transcendant genius.

very powerful piece... simply incredible.

p.s. hope you've cheered up!

Awesome imagery, just makes the whole poem work... a very dark feeling comes out of it. Great job!

That was so awesome!

Excellent! I loved the imagery you used, the poem was dark, yet beautiful. Well done!

Wow - this was so dark, so beautiful.. so beautiful... Absolutly amazing! I loved how it flowed, and rhymed. This peom... amazing *is at a loss for words* Brilliant, beautiful ... I love it!

~ CoolBeans18s

wow! the imagery you used was fanatstic, full of emotion and darkness...lovely!