What a wonderful ending... *sniff* Ok, so it didn't bring tears to my eyes, but I really did like it! Richard was a well-developed character in the short amount of time you had to, well, develop him.

Overall, a really excellent story; I was glad to see you post a mini-novel, just to see how you handle prose as opposed to... poetic stuff. What every wording in poetry is called. So, keep up the awesome work!

Goodness... what a brilliant plot ploy about Amiee dreaming the same things that Richard was writing. Now I'm quite intrigued and excited to read the rest. I love it!

One thing I'd like to point out in reading this is your attention to important details. Sometimes, in the thread of a story, or in the heat of passion in a writing period, writers tend to go overboard and write so much vivid detail about pointless things that the message or important facts of the passage get lost. You describe things perfectly, really, and I can follow the plot, which is very interesting, and has piqued my curiosity. Great work!

I'm glad I got around to reading this; it's quite good work. A couple things I'd like to point out.

1.) The opening paragraph of the story pulled me in instantly, like a talentedly written first paragraph should, so kudos on that.
2.) The line, "Life in the fast lane was faster than it seemed, but it never abused him" for some reason struck me as a VERY well-constructed sentence; very professional.
3.) The two lines "It was something that he had learned to love, but was something he might soon regret." and, "That something, she would later realize, would regrettably cost her a great deal." mimiced each other well, especially using regret in two different forms for two different meanings.

Great work on the plot; it's quite interesting. I love it!

Well written. I suppose a problem is that i have a very short attention span so i sort of like...WOW A DOG!...yeah as i was saying, the story was a bit long. It would be better if you cut the story up into seperate chapters so that you can have a break inbetween reading bits even if it is only for about 2 seconds. It just helps to break it up. Other than that this was quite proffesionally done.