o this is VERY good. it's one of those poems that has an indecipherable but distinctly effective aura hovering through and around the words. i read this in color, if that makes any sense: i was picturing everything in grayish-blue (which i attribute to the aura). the whole thing is great but i absolutely adore the second stanza:

don't close me in
hold my spirit down
with earthly stone
and thoughtless dirt

the thoughtless dirt in particular made an impression on me. great poem chica, kudos to ya. :)

well done, some of the lines threw of the tempo a bit, but it was still good

Wow. This was really fine work.


~Heart of the Sword

A very emotional poem. You could definitely feel the power behind the words... Been a little bit since you posted something, good to see you have now =) Keep writing, this was great!

Brilliant! This is wonderful! This had a lot of strong lines, like the "preserve what is left/ in verses and song" I really liked that! Wonderful work!

~ CoolBeans18s

Great work, very similar to shakespeare's sonnet but still your own. Your writting keeps getting better and better but i still like the one about me more hehe