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| Li Nika 2008-07-06 ch 5,  | abuseThis story is great! I really love it! The character's are so real in some way. I don't really know how to explain it, but they just have this feeling around them. I also think that the story is very well written. It's easy to read, and I really like how you have divided the paragraphs. It's so easy to read! Please don't take to long to update! I'd really like to se what these guys will come up with, and what will happen. |
| beloved18 2007-01-15 ch 5, | abuseawe no fair i was enjoying the hell outta this story and u jus stop -.- |
| distortedreflection 2007-01-15 ch 5, | abuseYou know Matt's personality and the way you let him be percieved has changed greatly from in the begining. After the first few chaps he turned into a sappy pancy. Not that I don't like that type of character but for what he was like in the begining was a stronger overall better character. I know that this has to do with character develpment but could you go slower with his changes. It's hard to realize it's the same character. Now onto "Lee" why why is he such a jerk. Matt's falling in love with him and he's diggin him so why is he still Lee. Not whichever his real name is. He's gonna break his poor lil' heart. His new girl whatever her name may be since I suck at names is desperate. Can she not get a man on her own and must sick daddy on them thus making them fear for their job and tempt them into the hell with having to marry that god awful annoying woman. Now if I upset you with my opinion I'm sorry and for all my critisim I'm properly hooked on this story. So update soon. |
| Shadowy Fluffball 2007-01-15 ch 5, | abuseContinue! |
| afk 2007-01-12 ch 5, | abuse** ** **! why doens't he tell him about that woman! eek i know i can feel it comming! matt is so sexy! really! hahaha |
| unknwnfuture 2007-01-12 ch 5, | abuseAw, just read the first five chapters, really good story I think you are doing a great job. The characters are great and I can't wait to read more. |
| ddz008 2007-01-11 ch 5, | abuseGreat chapter! I'm so glad that you have updated! :) Matt and Lee are so sweet with each other T__T But I think things won't last so much... Update soon, please! :) |
| Drew85 2007-01-11 ch 1, | abuseHow old is Crisp? |
| Lidyah 2006-12-14 ch 4, | abuseAw your killing me with all your stories. This has to be my favourite of them. I cannot wait for an update ♥ |
| Orangeena 2006-11-12 ch 4, | abuseMy my my. I'll do anything to give you inspiration to write more. It's been over two months since you've updated! This is such a lovely story, I hope you do continue. Matt is so adorable! I hope he and Jesse do move in with Lee, atleast at some point. somehow I just don't see Matt and Lee together with Jesse out on the streets every night. Anyway, I'll give you whatever you want if you update! I love this, really. Cheers to that! |
| chocolatedemon 2006-09-14 ch 4, | abuseCute. |
| distortedreflection 2006-09-11 ch 1, | abuseAllo, just wanted you to know this stories great i like matt he's so awesome. He sounds so cute. *cough* well anyway keep up the good work. |
| The Fleff 2006-09-10 ch 4, anon. | abuseNU!!I was just really getting into it... v.vlol It's really good! lol... But it definately neesd more descriptive... scenes... XD>.> |
| afk 2006-09-09 ch 4, | abuseaww cute chapter! waiting foward for the weekend! ;) |
| Mage Dudette 2006-09-08 ch 4, | abusejst found this, and wow, cute-ness! hope you update soon ^^ i'd love to see this develop a lot more. |