Wow! That sounds very familiar. I'm going through the same thing. Anyway, great job! I loved it, keep writing!

Good work. I think your writing is better than mine, I can't write for **. My poetry blows. Hey its O.K you havent ever really read my stuff, I like your though. Have a nice day : )

interesting not really great emotion... good idea & i like the ending but maybe focus more on your emotions...