Reviews for The Obsidian Disc

erpkewotjewt 2004-03-15 ch 1,	Damn, I started reading this in Junior Achivement and wasn't able to leave a review. All I can say is HOLY HELL! Where is the rest of this damn thing, and I mean NOW! Your work is amazing. Are you fimlar to Sabrial, by Gath Nix, 'cus this sounds like his work, like real **! Why haven't you posted in so long! Okay, I'm begging you now, finish this. I'm so excited! Amazing, amazing job!
Pseudo mac Cormaic 2003-12-10 ch 1,	Oi. I really like your main character, Jesethalim, he seems very realistic and easy to relate to. Your characters are VERY strong, and very well developed, IMO. Great work there. However, the things that need to be improved, again IMO, is dialogue and the descriptions of your enviroments. Your writing seems to flow at times, and be choppy at others, which suggests that you have found your grove, when the words just seem to flow out of you. The true test of your writing is finding that grove again and staying in it, so that the words just flow from you with as little effort as possible. Very good work, best of luck. Peace -Pseudo (Check out the Saga of the Eternal Blue, I hope you'll enjoy it)
Kimra Dattei 2003-12-01 ch 1,	hey there. this is an awesome story. i'd really like to see more on it. another thing, you have a great imagination for names. that's kinda where i have trouble. well, like i said, good story.
zariccc 2003-10-08 ch 1,	Pretty interesting.