Reviews for Leaving the Light

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charm en route 2008-07-09 ch 30,	I'm scared by very large paragraphs without break, mostly because I get hyper and can't concentrate on what sentence I'm on and whatever. And this chapter is totally crazy, because I think fictionpress mest it up and took out all of your spaces and whatnot. I'm actually just reviewing to tell you about the technical problem, but while I'm here let me express the love I now have for your writing/story. I love your writing/story. :p
gwen 2008-04-20 ch 55,	I realy enjoyed reading Leaving the Light, but I must really ask if you had enjoyed reading the novel 1984, for some aspects of it creeped into your writing. When Toni was talking to the king after she had the ten lashes and he told her something along the lines of 'you can help yourself' (or something like that)I half ecpected her to say 'you should have done this to Bram! Bram, not me!' in a real Winston betraying Julia fashion. After Keir had mentioned that if 2+2=5 it would be five... I kept looking for ways to relate what you were writing to 1984. And it let up until the very end, you know? Because if I remeber correctly from the novel the white always loses, B.B will always be around (end of story).As it went the same for Toni, she will always have to be under the thumb of the king (just like Winston was always under the thumb of the government). Come to think of it, I also recall a part of L.L that said that Toni needed to be loyal to the king (or something like that) and I ahve to tell you that I was looking for them to say that not only did Toni have to obey the King, but gosh darn it, she had to LOVE the king as well. All in all, it was a good novel that kept me on the edge of my seat, and I am totally going to read the next part asap. ^^
Estelin 2008-03-01 ch 55,	this story was excellent. I can't wait to read the second part. Keep up the good work and writing.
X-Romantic-X 2007-09-04 ch 55,	this looks good, but i don't think i can read it because the way its only on the left would just annoy me sorry. But it looks brill, i luv stories like this.
Andy Lex Bain 2007-01-21 ch 1,	Some of the sentences are rather long. Other than that its pretty intriguing and piques my interest. Although then I saw how many chapters there are...lol
Complications 2006-11-30 ch 16,	I'm thinking of a word begining with P... smiles I liked these 2 chapters. I didn't think I would like The lady with a K name (sorry...), but I think I do now. P.S. I said I was posting the third chapter today, but I can't. microsoft word on my computer keeps crashing and trashing my work. grumbles
Complications 2006-11-29 ch 14,	Sorry you probably got a flood of e-mails from me yesterday. I don't always review every chapter, I just kept forgetting the main point I had hit the review button (pathetic but it's me so...) I tend to listen to keir more when he talks, because Toni is a bit eccentric (I don't think that's the word) in this chapter. I wouldn't get so worked up over the knife, I would just be sure to remember it. There are a lot of questions she (and others) raises throughout the story which have not yet been answered. That bugs me but it happens in many books I've read. I think the only reason the story isn't easy to get into, is because of all the hints at the time jump (it's not so bad, not bad enough to change the story I think) and the snippet format is interesting but it gives one many chances to get distracted. I smooth flowing story keeps one involved. I'm not saying I'm good at either types of writing. I would really appreciate it if you would read my story "Easier said then done" it's a slow update though and it's probably got too many mistakes. Oh and I read so much yesterday because I was working... bad of me but it doesn't slow me down (lots of scanning involved). I can't write and work though. Cheers.
Complications 2006-11-28 ch 12,	this is the best chapter so far. There were so many little high lights (well I call them highlights). Yeah I get what you mean about keir not being unstable... I think. the story takes to long to get into and I don't think that's a good thing, but I do think it's a good story. lol. I can ramble.
Complications 2006-11-28 ch 11,	"...You know I'm really not that bad." Had it been anybody else I probably would have jumped out of my seat, but I was expecting Keir, after all my thoughts have rotated around him all day. "I'm only harsh at times. When I need to be."..." ~ you don't actually say who she's talking to. Makes the rest of the chapter a bit confussing. The radio bit was cool. I liked that alot. her developing obsession with Keir is a bit anoying, but not to a great extend. I'm just starting to wander how things are going to work out for her. Sorry I skipped a few chapters. I think I only had one question from them is the dying moments (or the last moment before they're turned) imprinted in their eyes? cause that's what the scene where she saw something in his eyes reminded me of. If not can I use that? cause it's interesting and can have a few side effects... lol.
Complications 2006-11-28 ch 9,	good chapter.
Complications 2006-11-28 ch 8,	I read it and I didn't like it. obviously it wasn't a chapter meant to be liked. I didn't like the referal to years as well. But as you said it was nessecary although it didn't make sence in my mind.
Complications 2006-11-28 ch 7,	"Racing for the position already? Gee and yesterday you wanted to run away from here. What changed your mind?" That was funny. lol. I like the word sire as well. Interesting, I don't read it often. This was a very well written chapter. The feelings where conveyed very well. I don't know what I would have done differently in her position. What could she do besides get herself killed? And throw food at that guy... ggr. I also don't take head-ache pills if I can help it. I think that the last lord of the rings book was a bit monotonous, with all the dark land and stuff. I don't really want to plague this review with irrelevant stuff so I'll stop now. Very interesting chapter.
bex 2006-11-27 ch 6,	Keir suits his name. Did you do that on purpose? Un-stable vampires are always very interesting to read about. It was a bit strange ... how Bram told his version of 'that night' and she re-acted very well to it. It isn't heavy reading, but it isn't light; that's good. I knew what I was going to say but I forgot. laughs sorry. Smiles don't worry I'll stick with the story, I mean I survived the third lord of the rings book I can get through almost anything right? I write some hectic stuff sometimes, I don't know how I get through it. I didn't find the first chapters confusing (I haven't yet...) and it was nice to get a reply to the reviews. I tend to refer to all medicine as pills, don't know why. yeah, all medicine freaks me out... just the idea of it. I mean what is it really? lol. gtg.
bex 2006-11-26 ch 5,	I found time. very interesting.
the shadow in the mirror 2006-11-26 ch 4,	I would have stopped reading after this chapter, if it wheren't for three things. 1) I know she is/will be queen 2) I really want to know why Bram left so quickly and how he will react to her know (that will probably deside if I read on -forgive me) 3)They're vampires... you're a good writer... And I'm curious. I can't stand slavery... I also write it, but often I feel sick at the thought. now unfortunatly I have to go, I'll will read more. cheers

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