heh - it was different - rythmic, somewhat funny I thought anyway - anyway - it was good

Thanks for the reviews btw

that was different i enjoyed it a lot!

i like your poem, it's happy!

It is weird, but me like. Your rhyming was some times a little too good, like words that sound exactly alike make it sound a little... weird, but over all it was still a good poem.

Writers Block hasn't struck too badly, don't be discouraged.

the last stanza is jsut rnadomly put in there.. it needs a segway... otherwise its pretty good! sorry about the writers block

I agree it aint ur best, but it reli isn't bad. U hav sum reli great rymes.

Well done!

XXNerfxx

I'm sur u wil work through the writers block.

I for one LOVE poetry that's all about rhythm, and I think I discovered enough rhythm in this one to make me like it, although I wouldn't have minded it if you got the poem to pick up the pace a bit more.

Well, very creative.

But I am completely lost in translation.

What is this about, again?

I really like the idea of "Black clouds leaning".

That was so cool! please R&R my work! I need the reviews!