o...creepy... finish it! now!now!

Agh! Must...read...next...chapter...

oh. i cant wait to see where this goes from here. this is wonderful.
'her voice in that fake higher-pitched tone that wasn't her real voice' - youre a bit redundant there.
anyway. write more soon. bye now.

VERY very very VERY (I could go on.) well done. VERY much so.. KEEP WRITING!

this is getting good plz continue

woww. great great story. this is very nicely written and it flows wonderfully. your descriptions are great and youve also developed your characters well. except for that little gramatical mistake about that nothing-noting thing in chapter one, this is great. do come out with the next chapter soon. kay, have a nice day.

plz continue

Wow,I'm hooked. This is a really well-written story, and the characters are great. I'm really looking foward to finding out just who this Grimald Pary creep really is. Youv'e shrouded him in mystery, I'll give you that! ^__~ Anyway,keep up the good work!

Ciao,
Akita

very interesting start, suspenseful, nice detail

Teesha could be characterized more: tell us more about her, the "accident," why Danny is her favorite cousin, etc.

at first I wasn't sure whose house she was in and why

keep it up, dearie!

I like the way each chapter leads into another; it makes it very suspenseful to the reader. I can't wait to find out what exactly is going on...

Excellent start! The writing style is wonderful, but the characters could be fleshed out a little more. Possibly some subtle hinting?

I like it so far, a good prologue.

Since it's for college credit you might want to fix this line:

Teesha paused and looked down at the tiled floor, NOTHING how clean it was, how free of dirt.

Other than that, it's clear of grammar errors. But some parts get confusing, like at first I didn't understand who's house it was.

Keep it up!