I love hte way that you broke up the phrase "I haven't woken uo yet" It adds emotion. Well done.

oh geez
that was a really angsty ending. good, VERY good poem-ish letter thingie, but it lacks some emotion. it's a little short. you can try adding a little, of what it felt like, or what the friend was feeling.
ja ne
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Oh my gosh! this is friggin awesome! i love how i'm feeling all depressed and stuff then i read your poems and you describe exactly everything i am feeling at the moment...kind of creepy, but still really awesome! great poem!

wow...the end had a twist that i really liked. it was so well written, you do an awesome job with simple words.
chloe