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| -a-random-writer- 2006-10-11 ch 17,  | abuseum...i was actually kind of disapointed with this story, all the others that i have read that you wrote were much better. you didn't really go in depth with your characters and your characters were typical. for example, alexandra was the typical antagonist, there were no redeeming qualities about her at all. plus, don't you think that they were all a little bit, young? alexandra had a 2 year old son and she was 14. and you never explained what exactly she did that ended her relationship with lunar. you have written better stories. |
| rael 2006-07-08 ch 17, anon. | abuseThis was pretty fluffy. I don't think we ever really found out what Lunar did to Alexandra, and what their past was. |
| R. Hanks 2006-04-30 ch 17, | abuseace story! thx couple of mistakes wit he/she thin but i loved it ta x |
| Alenor 2006-03-11 ch 17, | abusehm...ok then. it was great, finished really quickly thought but meh. still good, cya later. |
| Purple-Butterbear 2006-03-10 ch 17, | abuseAnother wonderful story that made me giggle and sigh in happiness :D |
| Purple-Butterbear 2006-03-10 ch 1, | abuseYou keep asking us to review and we do and you get loads of them. here's my question: Has your mailbox ever exploded or something? |
| Eva Lilac 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseIt's funny...I am sort of like Rayne, in a way. Well, lots of ways, actually. I'm a tomboy, don't wear makeup, don't really care what other people say (unless they're my true friends), and have pretty much all guy friends. Odd. Well, great story, I've read it three times now, but it's still just as good every time! Keep writing! |
| rachelle 2005-11-05 ch 17, anon. | abusei think u got ur math wrong. wasn't moon two when he was a baby? since 15 years passed, he should be 17. sry if i've come out sounding like a snobbish know-it-all. |
| SapphireIce68 2005-08-13 ch 17, | abuseAw... its so cute! I love this story! I really like your writing style... I read a couple of your other stories too... and this own has got to be one of the best so far! :)Happy writing! |
| Eva Lilac 2005-08-08 ch 17, | abuseHuh...rather cheesy ending, if you ask me. Not that that's a bad thing, its just a bad thing. Sort of. Not really... is it a bad thing when you don't understand what the hell you're talking about? |
| Mythical Luver 2005-07-15 ch 17, | abusewow... pretty good story, one of your better ones... i like how Lunar and Rayne got together, and eventually married. Alexandra is rude though... how cuite that Lunar and Rayne got Moon, and had another child together... i whish i could write as good as you, but, no such luck... *sigh* anywho... i think that's almost all of your stories i've read, just like 5 more (if you haven't noticed... i read one author's stories as much as i can, and THEN and only THEN i go onto another author) please, write more good stories, because i get bored when i'm not reading something... (ya, i know, i'm a dork, but i don't really care! so HA!) bye-bye!~Mythical Luver~ |
| sam the bear 2005-05-27 ch 17, | abusei finished reading this story but i have to say everything was quite good until you decided to end it with '15 years later'. could have done alot more, though if thats all then thats all. if you want to expand on this when you're bord or whatever you could use the idea of Alxandra 'fighting' for custody for Moon. and by the way isn't Lunar like 16? (before the '15 years later thing') |
| justcallmebubba 2005-04-16 ch 17, | abuseaw that was cute. |
| Lady Katreina 2005-04-04 ch 17, | abuseThat was so good! (note: I usually don't review chapters if there is more chappies up) |
| Shahr 2005-01-23 ch 17, | abuseAwesome story! I loved it! Keep writing stories like that.! |