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| One-Hand Clap 2008-04-20 ch 1,   | I didn't understand why on the end of some lines there was commas, where on others there weren't. Probably just my persnickety self, being persnickety. However, that's the one thing I didn't like. I loved the emotion in this poem was spectacular and it was good the way you endeavoured to get the reader to feel it too. - Clap trap, from review marathon [link in profile] |
| frostany 2005-03-18 ch 1, | Wow, this really captured a lot of emotions and feelings, it was really great. I totally empathize with the feeling of losign control and the way the world goes on with out you but you try to hold on. I loved the way the phrases were short and sweet. Just enough to get your feelings across, no excess meat in it or anything. i also thought the title was very appropriate. |
| hypocrite extrodinare 2005-03-18 ch 1, | wow... thats awesome... I feel the same sometimes... |
| Deathra 2004-12-03 ch 1, | Hello, its me again...Satisfaction. Just wanted to say that this one is great too. I like it alot. |
| Identity 2004-02-15 ch 1, | interesting flow. i liked it though. |
| Seeker of the Way 2003-12-14 ch 1, | very well said. My sentiments exactly. |
| Anna Hartford 2003-12-12 ch 1, | Wow. I've read quite a few of your poems and I love the way you're able to convey emotion almost naturally. Loving it! Anna xx |
| Gercian 2003-12-01 ch 1, | nice.. even tho very simple.. but then again u said u were simple.. simple is good! |
| Lina Inverse 2003-11-19 ch 1, | You turned confusion into a visual experience. Good job ^_^ |
| Static Black 2003-11-18 ch 1, | I like this poem, very descriptive. The repeating of sentences didnt catch my attention but all in all it was quite well. Keep writing and good luck! ~Jade |
| DefianceIsMe 2003-11-03 ch 1, | Oh boy, have I been there. I constantly have this feeling that things are slipping from my grasp and I can't control any aspect of my life. It's quite frustrating indeed. I love the imagery in this piece. It kinda reminds me on being on one of those spin thingie rides and passing this one place you want to read out to...but it always passing you by...always. |
| Silent Dreamer 2003-10-12 ch 1, | yea i feel the same way all the time. great poem i love it a lot. |
| coldslit 2003-10-11 ch 1, | i havnt been back to check your stuff out in a while- i really like this new one. i like the rhyme scheme. i like this- to me, it describes life in general, and how you cant control pretty much any of it |