aww that so sweet. u wrote a poem for me. aww thanx a whole load hunnybunh. and i really do mean it. its sweet.
but little correction, dunt like the pain its just better than my other option. this is gonna be long so if i still remember i will write another poem for u. ok. cool. bye.

Deep, dark and bloody as Hell. You use blood a lot, which is something to ponder all by it's self. Great message and you wrote it very well. It almost has a 'owner's manual' feel to it, cause and effect sort of thing. Anyways, good work.

Bless.

hey, Izzy J told me to read this, ur poems in general, br you are probably the best writer I have come across on FP.net, honestly, this is brilliant, truly amazing, everything rhymes, fits, the poem has a great flow and its just... br, freaky, but awesome! Great work! love and good luck. Twilight

wow. i must say it seems a little harsh, but amazing poem, great talent.

Let's see...I love the beginning with the [ ]. A wonderful flow to this poem and great rhyme, too. It's all so natural. Jeez, how long did it take to write? Lemme list down all the lines/phrases I am PARTICULARLY gleeful at:

You pray for water to wash yourself clean
Only to leap into filth and speak the obscene.

Blood betrays Lie.

But like it or not it’s how these things work
Such is the price for a ** gone berserk.

You bark and you whine, you screech and you hiss
You’re such a bloody ** genius, riddle me this:
Put a knife to your wrist, twist it like so
Is the blade at fault for your own bloodflow?

I shan’t light your pyre; you’ve done so already
I’m just here to keep the whole thing steady.

Hm. You should capitalize the line starting with "the protest of one" and with words like "**" and "**" perhaps it should be PG-13?
Hee hee. "Shan't" is such a British word. I like this poem...love it, in fact. I can feel your scorn, your derision, your contempt all throughout this poem. And it stays with me after! I remember reading this the first time. Bravo, Noah. I LOVE this poem.

-Izzy J.

this is a very good poem. is it for who i think it is?? well, then my advice would be, she desrves what she gets if that's what you think. but, hey! i'm no judge here! well done!

chrys