 Dancing Waters 2004-07-04 . chapter 1I've read this one before but never left a review for it (I've reviwed too many of your works... lol!).
I came back to find it because the second-last line kept on echoing in my head:
'Tell Them my heart pumps only blood, nothing more.'
That is very, very powerful. At least to me it is. To me, blood has a significant meaning. (Yes, I'm weird)
Might seem like you're losing it, but you aren't. Hehehe.
Ok this might seem like a weird question, but, Noah, you don't believe in fate, do you?
Hope you don't mind me addressing you by your name (though why I would say this, even I do not know... lol! It's 3 in the morn. I gotta go get some sleep).
Don't need to say your writing's good; everyone says that =P
Just wanted you to know that that one line stood out the most and led me to review this poem, though I don't think I have said much that is of worth.
-love, Enat |
 Aimee Raven 2003-11-08 . chapter 1I;m crying, really now, for the first time in my life over a poem or a story...gotta mean something doesnt it? totally numb now...with... ok, proper review.
Gone is my joy, my break from this hell
The catcher below whenever I fell
To care is to love, to love is to burn
Yet I find only ice in the fire I yearn.
it;s beautiful *grabs a kleenex*, the way it evolves, the emotion... ur vocabulary is very good and it;s obvious the poem means something to you..wish I oculd say more..love and good luck. Twilight |
 LiquidGenesis 2003-10-20 . chapter 1"Tell Them my heart pumps only blood, nothing more."
My favorite line, next to the very end. Again with the blood, it must have a special signifigance to you, I know I use some objects over and over again because of their meaning to me. It is used very well and your use of vocabulary is wonderfully refreshing. Bravo.
Bless. |
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