strikes right in the heart...
-love, enat.

"We are the stars now." I love it.

1st up: i love that quote *LOL* its so perfect for this site and so incredibly ironic...maybe ill steal it from the calvin guy and make it a cycle...oh im just so evil today, all in a days work i suppose...
secondly: found it funny that this poem kinda leafed off from someone saying that about couples...because i was just ranting about it before...as i do, and for that specific reason.
thirdly (and finally - im sure to your desperate releif: this was a fantastic poem, there was something about it which really sprung out and clung to my heart. your choice to do it in narrative was perfect, because it made the poem more of a bitter sweet soliloquy, which really left a lasting effect of deep thought.
the first stanza especially gripped me, "a loveless soul/finds you" it seems so ironic to me, and so excruciatingly beautiful...i love the idea.
great poem, kudos!

another good poem...good style...kind of ambiguous..but a little ambiguity is great

The different 'levels' to the poem is a real mind blower at almost three in the morning, I'll tell you. The ending stanza leaves the reader wondering about something. There seems to be a top (stars), middle (you) and then bottom (ground, or maybe Hell) to this one, which is different than all of your other stuff. Interesting and sweet, in a weird sort of way again.

Bless.

Aw, sry, but that is so cute! Maybe you don;t want your poems qualified as such but it is really. and well, very well writren too. lvoe and good luck. Twilight

omg! y r u writin poems 4 her? a gud poem but 4 wrong gurl! she is a ho! she has boyz in her room! she goes 2 boyz' rooms al da time! she not faithful 2 u!

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*smile* A good metaphorical poem. It is rather too bad that sometimes uploading a poem makes it have spaces when you don't want them... There is something rather beautiful about stars in the sky, isn't there?
You never told me that was what sparked off this poem! OOps. *feeling a bit of guilt* I hope we didn't make anybody else uncomfortable besides the McDonald's guy!
Nice poem, Noah. And thanks for another! *hugging you*

-Izzy J.