ok honestly i skimmed this and i'll tell u why. u repeated "why do they" way too often. i really liked the phrases, they held just the right emotion with just enough imagery, but the continuous, "why do they" holds this poem down. it would be better, and i urge u to try to eliminate the "why do they"s maybe make the phrase without it fit well, and then at the end of each stanza thingy write a simple "why?" and example would be "they shroud newborn fire/cast shadows when light is gone/ beat that which is falling/ and pull that which is stuck/ why?" ok anyway nice job.

interesting use of repitition..i liked it a lot

i wish I knew why...but that was a very good poem...you can feel the...well I think at least that one can feel you are quite angry...annoyed at least, and the repetitions are usually boring but they are very good there, great job. You write great stuff...keep writing. love and good luck. Twilight

no one really noe's. it's life, maybe though they enjoy the pain in others eyes. we'll never noe now will we?

All good points and all very true, the ending is especially worth asking. I know how that feels, why doesn't it just end uh? Great work and very expressive, and good night. Read more laterz.

Bless.

Some of the other poems I read which have repeating word/s at the beginning of each line often get monotonous or boring, but this definitely isn't. Great phrasing in the rhetorical/philosophical questions you ask. Also like how sometimes one line relate to next one somehow for every two lines. (Such as hands/legs are limbs and skin/lungs are organs and fire/shadows have to do with light) The contrariness of the questions/lines also make for deep thinking.
And of course! The last line...Not so philosophical, but it is definitely one pondered by many and often! Climatic line, the rest of the poem builds up to it...
*thumbs up* Nice job, Noah.

-Izzy J.