| Reviews for time of your life |
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Lia 7/9/09 . chapter 1 Nice story, and great song as well |
Rusty And The Rubix Horse 4/12/09 . chapter 1Pretty good. Well written too. I think I like, "I think he senses that big emptiness in me where she once was," the best. |
VELVETxKISSES 3/28/09 . chapter 1-sigh- this was great. Really captures my emotions at the present moment. Unfortunately. |
Quillian 10/23/04 . chapter 1That was perfect, because I could relate almost completely. Just with a bit of a situation I'm currently in, a certain person I have in mind. It suited my mood and I'm glad I got to read it. bravo ) |
Stelynn 3/26/04 . chapter 1I liked it. A lot. Now I'm gonna go see what else you have. |
Lina Inverse 10/17/03 . chapter 1This was written very realistically- I could really see into your main character's personality in even such a short story. This "he" in her life is so vague... You probably intended to leave it a little bit vague, but IMHO it would be better if you offered more about how your narrator met this man, and left his personality a mystery. The narrator knows how she met him, but since she isn't that close to him, it would be more fitting for her to not even know what kind of a person she is. Another comment- a really nitpicky one... where you said "100 mph" it just kind of sticks out... it would look more normal if you wrote it out. |