Reviews for When You Own the Universe

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hz128 2008-07-20 ch 4,	abuseOMG! remind me to die of laughter! i was up at 1:47 when i read this part: Now that made me angry, and I was already angry. My anger management counselor told me that in time like these, I need to sit back, and calmly count backwards from ten. Ten; I’m going to wring his little neck and shove it down a toilet. Nine; I’m going to flush it. Eight; I’m going to pound him to a pulp. Seven; I will find a hungry, rabid dog and sic it on him. Six; this isn’t helping at all. And i nearly DIED of laughter! Seriously, my sister who was up IM ing her frend stared at me and asked me wut was so funny and i couldnt tell her bcoz i was laughing so hard. you must think im really crazy for laughing at somthing as stupid as that. But thats me;take it or leave it(I'drather you take it, thank you)! I laugh at stupid things. Now I'm rambling and so I'll stop now. Love the Story!
rockjam 2008-07-19 ch 26,	abuseAmazing! I loved every single moment of it. :D
amaryllisfaye 2008-07-18 ch 25,	abuseawesome stuff this. i heart u.
AkunamattataTM 2008-07-15 ch 26,	abuseUGGH! Loved it so much! The end was so amazing! She is like the same mean person with an edge...a fluffy edge. I swear u should get an award!! I loved it and im sory i didnt reveiw before but i usually wait till the last chapter to reveiw. Sincerely, mirium
.not.a.nice.GIRL. 2008-07-14 ch 26,	abuseWOW! that was a really great story! and over 30 reviews! wow...but anyway i cant wait to read chris's story!!
JordiiGirl 2008-07-14 ch 4,	abuseHehehe... in my life, I have broken 5 noses and given... well, lets just say a few more black eyes. It really hurt my hand too. Anyway, this story is really funny and interesting so far!
Elle Winters 9 2008-07-10 ch 26,	abuseHAHAHHAHAHAHA what a great ending.. i was so very close to crying.. until she went a little.. crazy hhahahaha aw jonah =)
Newbie NoseStud 2008-07-09 ch 11,	abusechapter 11's ending was awesome! i TOTALLY did not see that coming! kudos. but does that mean that he lost the bet?? hm. well, ill just have to read and see won't i. really great work!
Elle Winters 9 2008-07-09 ch 1,	abuseyes yes i do think you should continue.. but i already know ur going to so its all good. i though right =) yay for me!
Kicon 2008-07-08 ch 26,	abuseLove it! I'm in love with this story! It's amazing and...ugh, I'm not good with words. ^^ Awesome story. ~Kicon
Kicon 2008-07-07 ch 4,	abuseIt's probably scarier than sin because you KNOW he's going to get back at you in some sort of horrible way. ^^ Awesome chapter! ~Kicon
pretitiful 2008-07-06 ch 2,	abusehi. well i was always telling myself that i should read this story but i never got to it. but now that it's school holiday for me. i have time to read. and i alreaady like and im only on chapter 2 i find the part where mem goes" now im going to go and make myself an only child." its funny. looking forward to it.
Mikari Maki Chen 2008-07-01 ch 26,	abusethat was one of the best stories i have ever read, including all the printed stories and such! so good!... i loved it! i hope you keep writing.. i would love to read more of your stories!
bookworm 2008-06-26 ch 26, anon.	abusewhere to start, where to start, where to start. this story was brilliant. i loved it. not to cheesy, dramatic, but with humorous moments to lighten the mood, but perhaps a bit too complex. if i could make one recommendation it would be that if you plan on rewriting it (as in, in your redux), simplify it a little. the biggest thing i think, would be remington's and jonah's confrontation after jonah comforts alicia. keep that confrontation in the hallway, but remember and stick with the fact that remmy did seem to forgive jonah, because after that you went into that whole remmy stopped talking to jonah thing, which i think overwhelmed the already complex plot. plus if you take out that whole beating the ** out of each other in remmy's dorm scene out, it would make the scene at the end when remmy punches jonah in the bleachers a lot more powerful and effective. it would make his love for both his sister and elliot stand out a lot more just because it would be the first time we see him resort to violence. anyways, brilliant story. keep writing.
ImaginarySuperstar 2008-06-19 ch 26,	abuseI remember starting to read this story a couple of years ago and then not being able to finish it (at that time it wasn't complete). I'm so glad that I found this story now and read it. Granted, I'll probably be a walking zombie tomorrow since it's 4:45am right now and I've been reading it straight for the past few hours. :P I guess that in itself is kudos to you for writing such a captivating story. It is very well-written and the formatting makes it easier to follow. There were a couple of tiny spelling/grammatical errors but nothing big enough to distract me from the story itself. I love how the general storyline is a cliche yet you still managed to make it original and fresh. Keep up the excellent work and I look forward to reading more of your works. :]

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