Good piece. The thoughts were a little confusing at first but it all reads well.

I love the format, really effective in this. I love it, so haunting and yet beautiful.

!~* Noelle *~!

O.O

Oh, wow...I love the way you wrote this.

I'm not very good at constructive criticism...and really, I don't see anything to criticize. I'm ashamed.

Wonderful. Never stop writing, 'cause you're great.

I love the formatting. Really, really effective, I think.

The quality of the descriptive writing in some parts is so ethereal, it's lovely. Something about the coldness of Zachary (which I realy prefer to Zero, for some reason - glad you stuck it in) put me off him a little, but the last paragraph tied it all together.

'Of all the kisses Alexan managed to steal, or those rare ones Zero willingly gave him ... '

I love something about that.

Well written, a beautiful snapshot.

Wow. This was beautiful, captured moments I never in my wildest dreams would have thought could be spread out on paper (or the computer screen) for so many to see so vividly. Remarkable job, I'm VERY impressed.

~Gabby

That's a great story you have here, so bitter-sweet and, well, lovely. :) Too bad it's a one-shot, I would like to see more of Alexan and Zero.. I hope they will at least appear in [Between Us] ^^
Well, my review may not be very constructive (especially since I couldn't write a story if my life depended on it.. -_-; ) but I just wanted to tell you what I thought of it. :)

Oh, and I noticed in your profile that you liked slash and had nothing against ppl telling you URLs I decided to post two of my favorites ^^

http://w.angelfire.com/dragon/delilah/fiction.html

http://w.commonastherain.com/eros.html

I would have told you in an email but my email doesn't like me very much right now so... ^^