Hey! Great poem! You're best work yet!

Very beautiful poem. Vivid imagery. Well done. ^_^

i have 2 major critiques of this piece

1. i dont think its really much of a poem, more like a description of a painting you saw, but hey the meaning of poem is different for each person

2. pet peeve of mine, but USE COMMAS!

hehe

oh well, i liked your eloquence

zac
clownpuppet87@aol.com

I like this... it has a rolling quality that pushes the reader to keep reading, then the ending... so sudden and final, but doesn't seem to be a complete ending somehow. Lovely.

Mia