Good. The last four lines are like... wow. And I loved that 'Read my mind it tells the time' couplet. I'd try something like this if I wasn't a thousand percent sure I would ** it up. So well done to you.

Ah, I love the tone of this one. So cheerfully, almost sarcastically sadistic. Refreshing variety of vengefulness.
Best lines:'Orange Zest,' 'I hope you die.' (nothing special about the latter, except its dramatic straightforwardness.)

Wow, dude, what was on your mind while you were writing *this* one?

I love the lyrical feel of this; the rhythm is great, strangely playful until you get to the last few lines where it gets darker and ends with a bit of morbidity (word?) for good measure. The transition from zesty freshness of citrus and the morning to saline thoughts and cerulean mind ...

I *really* like this. I'd love for you to write more using the same kind of approach to the language. The structure worked wonderfully.

Now, don't disappoint me ... you allow *way* too much time to elapse between updates. *tut tut*

Wow.. I really love this piece :) It's really different from a lot of the other poetry I've read. I think it has a unique rhythm, and the wording is beautiful :) Good job.