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| jockette13 2005-09-19 ch 1,  | abusewow that was very powerful, i really enjoyed reading it, you really got across what u wanted to say, good job! |
| NumblesTheAuthor 2005-05-03 ch 1, | abusei love it! how sweet, and true...sometimes i just wish for a hug from the Father, but who doesn't? :) |
| Adonia Chesser 2005-04-28 ch 1, | abuseBravo, well done, It was a perfect poem. I loved every bit of it, and the end was great. |
| Sick Boy 2005-01-06 ch 1, | abuseYou submit to falsery. And in your submission you dwindle, you weaken, your break yourself. What would you do faithful, if you your god abandoned you, from what source would you find strength? This is the message I preach. Mankind cannot flousrish if he follows blindly as many do. Do not tkae this as an insult, for it isn't. It is an exchange of belief. Each and every indivuidual must learn to lead, must learn to make a god of himself. Mark these words. |
| silverxwings144 2004-05-13 ch 1, | abuseluv it! |
| Wolf 2004-04-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt just plain sucked. These people are just kissing your **. The rhyming was horrible. You should at least try. |
| luna-lovegood129 2004-04-26 ch 1, | abuseextremely well written. i'm impressed by your great dedication to God and Jesus and your faith as well. keep it up. |
| Bandbingo 2004-04-10 ch 1, | abusethis is pretty good. i don't think that God's love is anything like a cage though. it's more of how you portrayed it at first, a warm embrace. very nice. |
| Eulogy of the Scorned 2004-04-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is really awesome, I like it a lot. |
| Fuzzy Angel 2004-03-24 ch 1, anon. | abuseYou're writing is very strong! I love it! Once again, you're a great poet. You should actually publish these poems and alter them in a book :D Fuzzy Angel |
| methodius 2004-03-06 ch 1, | abusegood job |
| Misanthropic Sylph 2004-02-26 ch 1, | abuseesh. This is creepy. It seems like another cliche religious poem but the last line knocks you back. If it were mine I'd take out all the abstract nouns then elabourate on the idea of his love being a cage and the implications. *sweat drop*. However if this is not meant to be negative about the Christian than I'd advise you do the same only take out the part about the cage and find a nice, positive metaphor. Because the way it is it implies that your god is trapping you. Which is something you probably don't want to imply, if this be the case... |
| Bernard Marx 2004-02-25 ch 1, | abuseVery interesting... religion equals a locked cage. An analagy perhaps a little too close to the truth. I would really like it if you would explain to me how it is that you can contain your spirit like that? I promise not to be hateful or bashing... just inquizative. Look me up... AOL IM - Demagoguesrecess or email me Bernard_Marx_33@yahoo.com |
| Aslan Israel 2003-12-31 ch 1, | abuseGreat job, yet again. I'm not sure I like the fack that you described God's embrace as being like a cage. To me, I would think that a cage means being locked up and having no freedom, like all you can do is sit there and await your doom. But maybe you saw it differently, I don't know. Anyway, it was still a good poem. |
| soulspring 2003-11-13 ch 1, | abusevery inspiring and comforting... keep on writing for Him! |