very pretty poem and full of emotion great work!

I think you are doing really great writing you work on FPN, even though the reader might not get the real meaning to it, you are able to make the emotion tangible through the words...

Read all your work, and I like The Air the best...

Passionate and powerful!
It is in everything you wrote, and you are just 16? Keep doing what you're doing, I think you are doing it just fine...

Write on!

I like the 'I saw blue' part... a nice play on seeing red.

I like the last part of the poem best, from 'beating the truth randomly' that all made for a really strong ending. Enjoyed.

Mia