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| Aphrodides 2004-05-04 ch 4,  | abuseI like the story, it's caught my interest. When are you going to update?! |
| all-a-birds-grace 2004-03-19 ch 3, | abuseAw, this story is so sad so far! You've written it so well, you're a great writer! Update soon! |
| PHSclarinet04 2004-03-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey this is a really good story. You really portrayed the characters feelings in her situation. |
| Papillon Sierra 2003-11-04 ch 2, | abusewow... scary... |
| Papillon Sierra 2003-10-19 ch 1, | abusewow... very very good... in a very scary depressing way but very well written |
| A. Bush 2003-10-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseI would say this is a good start if none of it is true. However the inserts like "hey, I'm modest. Bite me" really take away from the seriousness of the story. In the beggining you keep it slightly a mystery of how it will end up even though i wouldnt of said "it wasnt a sex thing" kinda makes one suspiocus, it seems more enthralling when you creep up to the unimaginable and then just let it overwhelm the reader so they cant take thier eyes away. I apologize, i am a terrible speller. but i hope you finish this story and continue writting. Try reading a story of mine called "the man they called her father" mingles on the subject you have touched in yours. Lots of luck. Amy B |
| Kittle 2003-10-19 ch 1, | abuseIt is written well but the spacing makes it slightly difficult to read. |