Wow...thats all i can say...amazing job keep writing.

oh wow! I love it! Love it love it love it! *squeals* I usually stray away from poems but this is definately an exception!

That was really fine work.

Heart of the Sword

Good repetition of the lines

A simple thought

Sends me through

A whirling sense

Of loving you/Of hating you.

I like how it ends with "Longing for you". Different sentence structure from the past stanzas. The words "again" and "win" don't really rhyme in pronounciation, but it kinda works.

Sweet and whimsical...

-Izzy J.