There were some things I felt where out of place, but the poem was well done in general, wonderful imagry.

Hi!

I like this one alot, its good. Fits the season;)

-kaity(luv):D

Wow! I like this. I just don't get some things:

1) What happened? Why did he dissapear?

2) What IS he?

But GREAT poem.

EMQ

Very nice.

I want to read the first now! You've got a good plot here, and I like the descriptions you made.

Nothing overly flashy, and nothing too descriptive. I didn't really notice any spelling errors, but I couldn't decipher your rhyme scheme, if you had one.

Well, overall! Good story, good descriptions, good ending, and great voice. Good job!