Good story, I must say! A few niggles, but for pure quick pacing and enjoyment it's pretty much flawless. Black Fox seems rather ditzy, which is kind of unexpected, yet at the same time more fun now that Jack Sparrow is in the public mind.

"Wonderful!" Black Fox beamed at them. "I love parties!"

Great line. Good set up.

""A hanging of course. Or would you rather break all pirate traditions and be shot?" The High Judge asked, glaring at her."

You state in the second paragraph that she's going to be beheaded. That would be a minor mistake?

'A crowd of people was milling around the podium where, true to the High Judge's words, was the rope, just waiting for her neck.'

It might be better to shorten this a little just to 'the podium where the rope was waiting for her neck', cutting out the commas and whatnot. Keeps the pace up nice and quick.

'The pirate grinned, and glanced at the Ralthani. Or... where the Ralthani had been three seconds ago...'

Good one.

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AW, how cute! And interesting! You should write more to this story, it is Fascinating!

Good story. It's hard to take the hanging seriously, though, when Black Fox is so cheeky, and there are a lot of modern words that ruin the tone of the story.

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ello! I LOVE the ending! fyi, thea lowe: AAron & Nia is up- ch 1 & 2, and by me saying that, you pry know who i am.

I really like this story! I love how the captain acts, so casual even at her own hanging. It's very funny. I know you said this was only a short story, but I hope you continue it. I see a lot of potential!