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| Honor Bound 2006-06-28 ch 1,   | nice viewpoint on a oinion. how bout layers on layerscenters wrapped by smelly lies--a persons facade a little to pesimistic(?) perhaps. |
| Katterree Fengari 2005-08-22 ch 1, | I like the "pearl blankets". It's interesting how you say they stay for warmth...onions are sometimes described as 'hot' when you bite into them... I like the "Union Embodied" partly because union is one letter off from onion...nice. |
| Perhaps Archimedes 2005-07-09 ch 1, | That was amazing :) It's truly fascinating how a small poem like a Haiku can be so perfect and meaningful. *Adds to favorites list* G'job! |
| crazy-lady141 2005-02-13 ch 1, | Very nice description of an onion and it's many layers. This makes a good Haiku! ~Nellas |
| sciwriter13 2004-07-06 ch 1, | very cool.i like your poem. |
| Topaz Waters 2004-04-19 ch 1, | Very cool. "Layered pearl blankets..." And I like the personification. |
| Caitir 2004-04-17 ch 1, | *grins* i never thought of it that way... but you're right. union embodied... in an onion. interesting concept- i like it! |
| daughterofthewind 2004-02-15 ch 1, | Wow, that was really good, I never thought that a poeam about a veggie could sound so good! |
| naughty-gal 2004-02-05 ch 1, | wonderfull write nice work |
| Summerdazed 2004-01-24 ch 1, | you know, you should be the haiku queen too (or king if you're a guy!)! =summerdazed= |
| I am the talking Echidna 2004-01-10 ch 1, | HEY this is GOOD. Keep on righting man. |
| Modern Poet 2003-12-29 ch 1, | Okay, you know you're good when you can make an onion sound facinating. |
| Aftertaste of a Razorblade 2003-12-16 ch 1, | Great poem, man. Just...utterly brilliant. Sorry for the lack of comments. I kinda dropped of fp.com and Sword's Edge ^^;; So sorry. But anyways, GREAT poem. So simple, and so...fitting. "Pearl blankets." That's such a cool description of a union. |
| disease3k 2003-12-07 ch 1, | You have given parts of the onion a use. It sounds like a living thing working in union with others. |
| Amethyst Haze 2003-11-29 ch 1, | Wow... taking an ordinary object and making it romanticized. Very clever. |