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Rocks Beneath the Water 2008-07-03 ch 15,	abuseHey! I just wanted you to know that your story made me laugh and cry and smile and giggle and all-that-positive stuff. I especially liked the end, when the power of music saved the day. Nice touch. :)
Daydream Nation 2008-04-23 ch 15,	abuseI love this. Witty dialog is witty. And the story is fun. ;D
Ruri Star Sykel 2007-03-26 ch 15,	abusegreat story i liked it alot!
Lost In Oblivion 2007-03-10 ch 15,	abuseOh wow. I'm a bit late on adding a review aren't I? Just wanted to let you know, very good story. Like nothing I've read before, so I really liked it... Just thoguht I'd let you know.
D. Empress 2007-02-27 ch 7,	abuseWhy's the formatting all screwed up? It makes reading a pain in a butt. The story's really good, though, so I shall persevere. Tristan has something to do with that lost heir, doesn't he? So cool! And a threesome! O_O
cyra 2007-02-11 ch 15, anon.	abusereally delicious story. the plot, the perso and all were really interesting. as a fan of LaurellKH i think your use of this universe is as good as her Thanks for sharing such a great story
InsanePhoenix 2007-02-07 ch 15,	abuseI loved it! I read most of Laurell K. Hamilton's sidhe series, and I have to say that I like your story better :)
the sacred night 2007-02-02 ch 15,	abuseI think you really wrapped things up well. Especially that very last bit, with Tristan making that less than glorious entrance, calling for others' help, and it turns out a great show. It parallels the story as a whole, I think. I also think you made some very witty remarks in this chapter. For example, "I suppose if you’re not facing them in battle the sidhe riding to war are a lovely sight. The fanciful armor, the ornate helms, the elven steeds decked out in shining tack and barding and festooned with waving plumes of varied hue or flowers. Rather like being menaced by a homicidal parade float." I actually saw numerous characters' reactions as if they'd heard the statement. It was amusing. Overall, the plot to this story was much stronger than the other things I've read of yours, because it really had a sense of purpose, like you really knew where you were going with it. There were a lot fewer loose ends and unanswered questions, no really glaring ones, but maybe a few minor ones. I think the story with Dwyn and Keir could have been better integrated into the main story, but first person made that hard. If you'd made a habit of switching POV from the beginning, it might've helped. Still, it was relevant enough that I wouldn't advise splitting it off. You got much better on the whole showing vs. telling thing as you went along; it was mostly at the beginning where there were instances of just dispassionately telling us "This is this" without giving us anything in the way of showing that this is indeed this. In later chapters, you revealed what the characters thought by what they did instead of just having them say "I feel this." People just do not talk like that. It's funny, a lot of stories on FP start out well and then get crappy as they go along because the author stopped caring. This story gets better by leaps and bounds as it goes on, not that it started out terribly, just that it got a lot better because you got more into it instead of losing interest. Or so I assume is the reason, perhaps I'm wrong.
the sacred night 2007-02-01 ch 13,	abuseAww. It seems Dwyn no longer has such a problem with sex being "frought with significance." And it certainly didn't bother me at all that you chose to accomplish their bond that way.
the sacred night 2007-02-01 ch 11,	abuseAww, this is so sweet! This chapter contains a lot of showing instead of telling, which is good. It's exactly what I was talking about before. You still maybe spell it out a little more than you need to, but you're doing a good job overall of showing how characters feel through events and through thoughts that don't just declare "I feel this." You have a talent for the art of the backstory. I almost wish there were prequels to your stories, because there's enough there that the 'past' would make a great story in itself, both for this story and the other one with Faun and Lin. Lots of characters have interesting backstories, too, not just the main ones, which is really nice because it helps us think of them as real people when we know they have pasts.
the sacred night 2007-02-01 ch 10,	abuseAww, things are going well for Dwyn and Keir. I was really ** at Keir at the end of last chapter and ready to write him off as a villain after all, since back when we first met him, we did kind think he was a villain. Kind of childish of me to separate people into heroes and villains anyway. Still, at the end, I like Keir again. Actually, I like him a good deal more ever since he said "Light of my life, where ever did you get the idea I was of the seelie court?" I swear he was channeling Lin. Lol. And then with Lin in mind, the talk of the queen made me wonder if this is one of the queens Lin knows, but I guess this story is in a slightly different universe than that one, since some of the other things about it don't quite match up. I'm intrigued also at how much bearing this side story will have on the main story and vice versa. Since there's this whole business about Tristan's uncle, I can tell they aren't totally seperate stories, and I guess that's why you didn't post it elsewhere, but I'm curious about why you chose the setup you did. I imagine it will become clear upon further reading.
the sacred night 2007-01-31 ch 9,	abuseOh, **. Somebody's really stepped in it this time. As always, I am in terrible suspense.
the sacred night 2007-01-31 ch 8,	abuseHehehe children. That's amusing.
the sacred night 2007-01-31 ch 7,	abuseOho, Tristan stands corrected, does he? Seriously, he ought to have known. Still, you can kind of understand how he felt before. That bit was a good example of showing instead of telling- when you described how much Jin was crying and he and Oisin were trying to save Tristan when they thought he was dead, and you didn't have to come right out and say "They care a lot about Tristan." The way you did it was much more vivid, and real, and interesting. That's what I meant about the other parts. It's not even a question of whether or not you reveal something, but how you reveal it or avoid revealing it.
the sacred night 2007-01-31 ch 6,	abuseGirl, you have a serious thing for nipple piercings. Funny, I see how flaky Tristan is. He just saw how hard Jin and Oisin were trying to save him, and how badly upset they were when they thought he was dying, and now he thinks he's unnecessary. Fast judgment is right. On the whole showing vs. telling question I brought up last chapter, I think you may have misunderstood me. I wasn't suggesting that you reveal everything right away. That would not be good at all. What I was referring to was the way in which you reveal it, namely just straight up telling us stuff instead of having something happen that makes us realize it on our own. Like when you had to tell me that Dwyn isn't the lyrical type and thus would be terse (which, btw, is kind of ironic since he does in fact write lyrics), you shouldn't have had to tell me that. It should have been told through the story and the things he'd said and done up to that point, which it wasn't. And staying in a character's voice isn't a reason to tell instead of show, either. If the character for whatever reason doesn't choose to tell us something, that's significant, and you the author should have a reason for holding it back or revealing it, as the case may be. Either put it in, in sufficient detail, or leave it out completely. Or maybe just hint at it. But the point is, if you're going to leave something out, there is an artful and deliberate way of doing it, and there is a lazy way of doing it.

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