WOW! this is soo lovely! i love the repeated line 'When have you heard a child cry?' its just so full of emotion. I really like this.

Great poem! =) Very inspiring...

really good job
r/r some of my work

No bad points as far as I can see ... good job. Reminds me a little of my poem 'Fed up'.


Blessed Be,

Andaren x

um .. kind of repetitious , but it is short so it may be OK. I liked the photo/war one better. But, this is good becasue it shows your range in style and talent.

I am not sorry I read it, if that helps.
(feels like a jerk now, sorry)
moving on to one more poem! (going backwards in time, I feel like Merlin!)

Well, as I am no poet, I cannot say anything about good or bad points. All I can offer is my opinion as a non-poet. This was a great piece that I, personally, very much enjoyed. I think it was excellent work, and that you are a wonderful poet. Great job!

~*~AbunaiChikara

aw, I can just imagine a little boy with teary eyes.

*Seeing Starz*

Hm. Good? The repetition of the phrase is nice, adds to it. It's...simple but melancholically sorrowful.

hiya!
i'm reviewing it!
thankyou for all of your reviews you sent to me! =)
this is really nice and the words used are great and also, appropriate!!
also, they ryhme!!
well done!
cya

so true to life and reminds me of my own childhood,a sweetpoignant poem