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| Fleur-de-lis Evans 2005-12-25 ch 1, | Wow! That poem was really deep and moving. It reminded me of the song Concrete Angel by Martina McBride. |
| Banpaia Daisho 2003-10-25 ch 1, | Best thing I've read all day. I still have a suggestion or two, though. Why the lone punctation mark (a period ending the 6th to last line) when the rest of the poem has none? Also, I'd break the 1st stanza down into something more the size of the second. Great imagery. So many poems strugle with this and end up being to vague, but there is none of that here. Great job. |