I have told you this before, but I'll say it again: I LOVE THIS. You could most definitely make this into a book or something...very good work! I almost like your fiction writing better than your FF.net stuff...you're extremely imaginative/creative, and you bring to life characters that you create. It's wonderful, keep it up!

I remember this! You sent this to me a long time ago...I would have reviewed before but I didn't know how...yeah anyway you said that you wanted "criticism"...I love it! The ONLY thing that I would change is this: take off the very last sentence ("It would be a long day for the Celestial Wraith Destruction"); it kind of takes away from the ending, which is pretty much perfect btw. Awesome!~etherealfire~

Very compelling! I found myself very intrigued but very confused. I hope you update soon so I can finally understand! Great start!
~Laura