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| Pharaoh chrispy 2004-04-07 ch 1,  | thats deep man... I like it |
| KatyGirl1219 2003-11-01 ch 1,  | This is possibly your best piece. I like the flow of it; the length of lines compliments the meaning and your ending ties it to the beginning, giving it a circular, completed flow. The imagery is great. Keep writing, you're awesome at it! ::hugs:: |
| Shadafakup 2003-10-26 ch 1, | Aha, I loved this.. I can certainly relate to this.. Lol, I tried to stop, really I did, I even wrote a piece on that (Breaking Free) but then again, I was never one for commitment.. Anyway, this was fantastic.. The tone, the feeling and the way the piece moved.. Its tragically beautiful.. You know, I was so absorbed by this because when you wrote it, I could practically see the scene enfolding in front of me.. It was just perfect and like wow.. ::speechless:: Anyway, it was a wonderful read.. The poem flowed naturally and certainly very well.. Moving, you did a fantastic job.. ~Shadafakup P.S. Lol, I don't usually do self-advertisement (in fact I can't stand it) but hey, I was wonderin if you could relate to some of my works.. Uh, on cutting.. Heh.. |
| Namir Swiftpaw 2003-10-26 ch 1, | This is my favorite of all of your pieces. I like the pace that the rhythm sets, and the rhyming is well done. Keep writing! ~Namir Swiftpaw |
| insanewhisper 2003-10-26 ch 1, | Thanks guys. It means alot that my poetry effects someone. I'll never go to deep. I don't wanna die. bNot yet anyway. |
| Lytheria 17th 2003-10-26 ch 1, | Groovy.. Haha I loved reading this one your style is a little simillar to one of my poems, but this damn site took it off my profile!! I would LOVE to see more of your works, please do update.. |
| IHJ 2003-10-26 ch 1, | A good poem, one that's extremely heart-felt. I cut myself, too, but not the wrists because I might cut too deep and...I don't want to commit suicide. I want to die by somebody's else hands. A car or murder or something. I cut words instead on my legs. (Jeans are our friends!) This a really good poem, just please don't take it too far or too deep with the cutting. -Izzy J. |
| AntiPleasure 2003-10-26 ch 1, | I should be saying "Don't do it or you'll go too far, there's help out there" you should, but I used to cut myself and still have the urge to. If you feel that cutting yourself is an escape then I think it's fine, it's almost like a reality check and it's better than drinking and drugs. May not make sense to you lol but that's what I realize now. I wish I could cut myself but I know it would hurt the couple friends that mean the most to me. If you feel it helps you calm down, that's fine, you'll grow out of this just be careful not to go too far. There IS help out there but I think those petty social workers do nothing for me, so I had to prevail it myself you know. I still want to die, I still get depressed, but I think it's something you can handle on your own. Anyways, this was a well written poem and you described the feelings well. *Jenna* |